Notes on a Script
See what J thinks about the fistfight
You’ll need to reference the bees again
“You’re crazy” could be bigger
– I am okay with the fistfight
“You’re crazy” feels like it should be a little smaller?
PAG12 update on Max’s whereabouts pls
Is Beatrice too close to Bridget?
FWIW I am also good with the fistfight
– It makes no sense she lifts the giant bowl
P25-32, 37, 39, 41 & 44 the black kitten is missing
Je ne suis pa sûr de la bagarre
no need for “Well you think I’m stupid”
P75 “It made the wolves to do it”
p.81 Obviously ignore me if you don’t agree, but I feel like the relationship
would be better expressed with slightly fewer aliens?
Please check capping instances of GOD
“Torn into pieces” again on 83
PAGE 91 busy af – strip it back here
This would be an excellent place for bees
“Eventually language will stops working”
Is the red here really red enough?
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Chrissy Williams is a poet, editor and tutor based in London. Her work has been featured by the BBC and her first book-length collection Bear (Bloodaxe Books, 2017) was one of the Telegraph‘s 50 Best Books of the Year. Her second book-length collection, LOW, was published by Bloodaxe in 2021.
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